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I like the formatting of this, getting longer, than circling around back to the main point. Keeps everything flowing at a nice pace.

That's really the only criticism I can levy. All in all, I can't really see anything bad in this piece. In fact, not only is it good on its own merits, but it excels above and beyond that simply for being something uplifting and encouraging. A rarity among many poems I must admit. For that alone, I would probably give full marks, but the way you write it also makes the piece feel personal to each person I think. Overall, a good piece indeed.
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Great-Lord-Dread Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Professional Writer
Thank you very much for this incredibly generous critique. I appreciate feedback and I'm glad you liked it.
ThePenVsTheSword Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2013  Student Writer
You're very welcome! I urge you to write more like it. It's a welcome sight to see uplifting pieces now and again to break the monotony of dark, brooding, angry ones. And I thank you for writing it.
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